"Good start to your video pitch idea. It looks like your are on the right track of making a successful video. Make sure you have all your bases covered including your references in MLA format and up to date information on the topic."
"Make sure you proof read and everything is grammatically correct, but great start on your pitch. Be sure you include your more information on Topic and Theme, include your references in MLA format and include outsourced video(s)."
"It looks like you are the right track to pitch your video. Just keep in mind what the overall requirements are such all your references, outsourced videos, and current information. Great job explain your theme and topic in detail."
"Describe what the plight of the Rohingya people in Myamnar. I would to see more detail and information about your topic. Make you include reference cited in MLA and outsourced videos. Good Luck with your project. "