"This needs to be more specific - do you think using data analysis is helping students and/or teachers improve or not? What will the title be? What will your outsource clip be? Please edit and publish again for credit."
"Bailey - Your topic and theme is Internet of Things and Education. Please explain in your pitch how your story idea ties into this topic and theme. Also, please note your title of the video and what your outsource clip will be."
"I am a little confused about how the outsource clip ties in with your story of using VR with getting over the fear of roller coasters. I think the storyline of VR and getting over fear sounds like a good one. You may need to re-work your…"